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Postby Frosthawk (?) » Tue Nov 24, 2015 6:11 pm

I'd like to think all of these characters are in a state of constant climax.
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Postby In West Fillydelphia (?) » Tue Nov 24, 2015 6:43 pm

Frosthawk wrote:I'd like to think all of these characters are in a state of constant climax.


Much like this story
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Postby Orange Fluffy Sheep (?) » Tue Nov 24, 2015 7:52 pm

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at this point im just mashing the keyboard vaguely around the letters

AN: stop flaming da story ok u dnot no wutz even gona happen ok!1111 so FUL U!111


Knowing what's going to happen, I can say the flamers are perfectly justified in making fun of this nonsense.

soz 4 soz 4 sayin alzhimers is dongerous but datz da mysteries opinin koz sosiety basically sux.


"Sorry for sorry for saying Alzheimer's disease is dangerous, but that's the Ministry [of Magic's] opinion, because society basically sucks."

Tara so carefully intertwines her opinions with her character's it's hard to remember that sometimes there are antagonists who don't share her exact belief system.

She's right that society basically sucks though.

Before we go on, I'd like to explain the Dark Mark.


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I gasped- there was a Dork Mark!

Basically, it's a magical brand of loyalty to Voldemort. Placed on the left forearm, Voldemort could use it to signal the Death Eaters to him by making the marks deliver a burning pain. When Voldemort's body was destroyed after his botched attempt to kill a baby, the marks faded to faint scars.

Just wanted to bring that up right quick.

“No!11” we screamed sadly. Snap stated loafing meanly.


Anyway we return to our protagonists chained up and Snap making bread with his whips.

He took out a kamera anvilly

Which camera? Snap's own one? Did he get a new one after Dumblydore blew it up with magic? Is it Vrompire's?

Then…………………… he came tords Darko!1! He took sum stones out of his poket. He put da stones around Draco and nit a candle.

“What the fuck r u doing!” I shooted arngrily. Snoop laughed meanly


Oh no, he's performing some sort of satanic ritual! Danny get out of there, away from the evil rap artist!

Remember what I said about burning evil wizard scars?

He polled down his pants. I gasped- there was a Dork Mark on his you-know-wut!11!


Snape's is right there on his junk.

No wonder he's so willing to advance Voldemort's goals. He suffers dick pains whenever Voldemort so desires.

Man could you imagine, Lucian and Bellatrix just present their arms and there's silly ol' snap droppin' trou

He waved his wand and a nife came. He gave da knife 2 me.


I'm sorry Snoop I can't take you seriously your tattooed tool is just hanging out right now

“U must stab Vrompire.” he said to me. “If u don’t then I’ll rap Draco!1”

“No you fucking bastrad!1” I yielded.


The great flaw of the antagonists of My Immortal is their insistence on cruelty. Vampire would be dead three times over if they just did it themselves, but for whatever reason it is mandatory that Ebony specifically kill him. Now the threat is launching a bad guest verse at Draco.

Wait no it's rape. I guess they are trying everything since threatening to kill him isn't getting her to do anything.

Snape's pants are still at his ankles btw.

But den Draco looked at me sadly with his evil goffik red eyes dat looked so depressant and sexy. He lookd exactly like a pentragram (lol geddit koz im a satanist) between Kurt Cobain and Gerard.


Don't

drag

Cobain into this

if I have to explain who Nirvana lead singer Kurt Cobain is then get da hell out of here!1

But then I looked at Vampire and he looked so smexy too wif his goffik black hair.


Obv. she's not going to do anything but beg for mercy from the merciless until the secondary protagonists bust in the room to save them from themselves.

I thought of da time when we screwed and the time I did it with Draco and Dumblydore came


I AM EJACULATING YOU MOTHERFUKERS

and the tame where Draco almost commited suicide and Vampire wuz so sportive.


"sorry your bf almost killed himself, let's play tennis" *stabs inexplicably young peter to death*

Snipe laughed angrily.


HAHAHA :seethe:

He started to prey to Volxemort. He started to do an incapacitation dancing around the stokes whipping Draco and Vampire.


He's quite nimble to be able to dance around with his pants at his ankles.

There are so many typos I can't make jokes about all of them. Christ.

Suddenly an idea I had.


Yoda she now is.

I clozd my eyes and using my vampire powers I sent a telepathetic massage to Drako and Vampire so they would destruct Snape.


Holy shit

her being a vampire was relevant

granted it was something supernatural when she's also a magician but still

her plan is basically "eliminate him!"

“Dumbeldork will get u!” Draco shooted.

“Yah just wait ubtil da Mystery find out!11” Vampire yelled. Meanwhile I took out my wand.


Wait, distract Snape. Oh.

“You ridiculus dondderhed!111” Snoop yielded. He took off all of Drico’s clothes.


Like, in one yank?

Did he have him get dressed just to get him nude again?

Just as he was about to rape him…………………….


Just your reminder that nothing in My Immortal happens unless it's in the nick of time.

“Crosio!” I shited pointing my wound. Snoop scremed and started running around da room screming.


Man I miss the womb typo. Wound just doesn't have the same appeal. You'd think you'd make it harder for the person who hit you with a torture curse not two minutes ago to do that again.

Meanwhile I grabed my blak mobile and sent a txt 2 Serious. I stopped doing crucio.


hlp me vmpr draco r chaind snap is torturin us! :(

“You dunderhed!111 Im going to kill-” shooted Snape but suddenly Serverus came.


Man this is not the reaction a person is supposed to have to torture curses.

Actually it's a magnificent typo that confuses first names. Sirius came.

That is not the reaction a person is supposed to have to someone else getting torture curse'd.

Snake put the whip behind his bak. “Oh hello Sev I wuz just teaching them sumthing.” he lied.


You'd think you'd put up your dork mark-branded johnson before hiding the whip

and somewhere in there is putting Drico's clothes back on.

But suddenly Lusian and Profesor Trevolry came in2 da room and they and Serious unlocked the chains and put dem around Snap. Then Profesor Trevolry said ‘Come on Ebony let’s go.”  


And more people come in and the situation is resolved by Ebony having access to quite a bit of equipment for being chained up.

This whole scenario is rather pointless truth be told. Next chapter the adventures in tim begin exactly as expected and the part where Snap was caught again but in even worse circumstances is barely relevant.

All we got out of it is that we have more information about Snape's penis. WOW. GREAT. JUST WHAT THE DOCTOR FUCKING ORDERED

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strange adverbs: kiss keenly; kiss passively; cry wisely; shook her head enrgtically lethrigcly; nodded ENREGeticALLlY; sacredly I hopped inside; screamed sexily; frenching passively; smelled happily; passively we did it; cry all sexy and sexitive; shoot angrily (actually using firearms); loafing meanly, took out anvilly
Oh my satans: 2
Windows broken: 1
Fucks attempted: 9
Fucks failed: 8
Unforgivable Curses: 6
great band names: Volsemort and Da Death Dealers; Fug and the Mystery of Magic; Alabastard
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Postby Space Ghost (?) » Tue Nov 24, 2015 8:22 pm

this just gets more and more insane
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Postby In West Fillydelphia (?) » Tue Nov 24, 2015 8:43 pm

If you're caught in a dark room with some people, your wang out, and a whip in your hand, "I was just teaching them something" is really not the line to use.
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Postby Angel Beat (?) » Tue Nov 24, 2015 8:47 pm

At least someone came. :fluttershock:
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Postby kidcoelacanth (?) » Tue Nov 24, 2015 9:25 pm

Orange Fluffy Sheep wrote:“No!11” we screamed sadly. Snap stated loafing


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Postby kidcoelacanth (?) » Tue Nov 24, 2015 9:29 pm

thats the best post i've ever made
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Postby SlateSlabrock (?) » Tue Nov 24, 2015 9:36 pm

Orange Fluffy Sheep wrote:He polled down his pants. I gasped- there was a Dork Mark on his you-know-wut!11!

This is probably the cleverest line in the entire story to date.

In a better story, it would count as an actual joke.
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Postby Angel Beat (?) » Tue Nov 24, 2015 9:38 pm

polls? dork marks?

:ponder:

He has Donald Trump in his pants?
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Postby Space Ghost (?) » Tue Nov 24, 2015 9:49 pm

yes
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Postby Angel Beat (?) » Tue Nov 24, 2015 9:50 pm

Now that trumps everything else. :fluttershock:
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Postby Frosthawk (?) » Wed Nov 25, 2015 12:37 am

kidcoelacanth wrote:thats the best post i've ever made


Congratulations :flutterunsmith:
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Postby Orange Fluffy Sheep (?) » Mon Nov 30, 2015 2:27 am

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we are now entering phase four as now time travel actually begins. If eboby actually did this immediately after professor sinister said to then the overall story would not be different except we would not know Snape's dark mark is on his dick.

AN: I sed shut da fok up u quiephs!111 stop kalin ebony a mary su ok u dnot even no wutz gong 2 happen ok so fuk u!1111 fangz 2 muh bff raven 4 di help!1111


"You don't know what's going to happen" is such a strange defense. Maybe it's just because I'm blessed by knowing what's going to happen (Ebony becomes more of a mary sue is what).

I will not attempt to begin to figure out what "quiephs" are. It is probably a bad word.

“I always knew u were on Voldemort’s side, you sun of a bitca (bufy rox!111).” Serious said 2 Snape.


Bitca is actually something from Buffy the Vampire Slayer, a character not knowing how "bitch" is spelled. If you don't know what Buffy the Vampire Slayer is, like, from cultural osmosis then wow. you're skilled.

Why Sirius is using it now is beyond me. He also seems to say the "buffy rocks" aside.

“No I’m not I was teaching them somefing!1” Snap clamed.


You have your branded dong out, Draco's naked, you have whips in your hand, and two guns were unloaded in this very room.

I think it's beyond that excuse.

“Oh fucking yeah?” I took some blak Volremortserum out of my poket and gave it to Serverus. He made Snap dirnk it. He did arngrily.


Veritaserum is a truth potion, that exists in Harry Potter because magic. Tara has somehow confused it with Voldemort and calls it Voldemortserum, except she can't spell. It has nothing to do with Voldemort besides starting with "v".

Then Luscious took out a tape recorder and started playing it while he did curses on Snap. Then Proffesor Sinister and Lucian made us get out wif them while Snape told his secretes.


So I guess Sirius is just sitting there, listening to Snape's deepest-

verb (used with object), secreted, secreting.
1.
to discharge, generate, or release by the process of secretion.


Eewwwwwww

Lucian took Vampure and Draco to the nurse after thanking me a millon times.


Did you at least let your son put on his pants buddy, I know it's a thing for draco to be dragged around places without his pants on but still

Profesor Trevolry took me to a dark room. Now I wuz going to go back in time to sedouce Volxemort.


Ok we're finally doing it, it's gonna happen. Let's just instantly forget what just happened, and that it hasn't even been a day since she said to wait a day. I think.

I don't even know anymore.

Moving posters of MCR and Nrivana were all over.


stop, stop moving, i wanna look at kurt, stop moving, gosh

Hermoine, Darkness and Willow came too.


"we're here too, hello, don't forget us"

I guess she forgot for a second she refers to Hermione by a different name, since she instantly uses the gpffix name

B’loody Mary gave me a blak bag from Tom Rid’s store.

“Whatz in da bag?” I asked Profesor Trevolry.

“U will c.” she said. I opened thee bag.


why was that exchange necessary

Everything between "oh fucking yeah?" and "Tom Rid's store" was one long paragraph, btw. Tara usually does paragraph breaks for new speakers. Except the next person to speak is Ebony again.

In it was a sexy tite low-smut black leather gothic dress.


Thank goodness she's not going with a high-smut model.

It had red korset stuff and there was a silt up da leg. I put it on. My frendz helped me put on blak fishnetz and blak pointy boots Willow had chosen. Willow and Darkness helped me put on black eyeliner and blod-red lipshtick.

“You look fucking kawaii, bitch.” B’loody Mary said.


gyahahahahahahahaha

“Fangs.” I said.

“Ok now you’re going to go back in tim.” said Proffesor Sinister.


"please eboby stop getting distracted by random shit and do this"

“U will have to do it in a few sessionz.”




hell yes sezessions

wait, sessionz. damn.

She gave me a blak gun. I put it in a strap on my fishnetz like in Redisnet Evill.


resident evil is the tragic love story of leon and helicopter guy

that's all

no other media

Then she gave me a black time-tuner.


Yes even the time machine must be black.

“After an hour use da time torner to go back here.” Proffesor Trevolry said.


I think Tara confused the "don't go further back than three hours" restriction with a time limit on how long you can stay back.

Then she and B’loody Mary put a Pensive in front of me. Every1 went in front of it.


Okay the Pensieve is a magical device that Dumbledore uses to contain his memories, because as an ancient-as-hell guy he has in fact too damn many and he needs to make room.

Harry used the pensieve to sort of "enter" Dumbledore's memories, watching them as though he were there.

This is important. Harry did not actually go back to the time and place. He just saw them.

Tara missed this part.

“Good luk!1” Everryone shooted. Darkess and Willow gave me deth’s touch sin.


I am glad you two have so much to add.

Then……….. I jumped sexily in2 da Pensive.


I imagine she took some ridiculous tits and ass pose as she leaped into a shallow metal basin to somehow enter memories of no one in particular while also travelling time.

Suddenly I was in fornt of teh School. In front of me wuz one of da sexiest goth guyz I had ever seen. He was wering long blak hair, kinda like Mikey Way only black. He had gren eyes like Billie Joe Amstrung and pale whit skin. He wuz wearing a blak ripped up suit wif Vans.


"he looked like every other guy I know. HAWT."

It was…………………….Tom Bombodil!1111 


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He was OMG HOTTER THAN GERARD EXCEPT NOT CAUSE THAT’S IMPOSSIBLE

goddammit

I was wearing & kin: 40
strange adverbs: kiss keenly; kiss passively; cry wisely; shook her head enrgtically lethrigcly; nodded ENREGeticALLlY; sacredly I hopped inside; screamed sexily; frenching passively; smelled happily; passively we did it; cry all sexy and sexitive; shoot angrily (actually using firearms); loafing meanly; took out anvilly; jumped sexily into the penisve
Oh my satans: 2
Windows broken: 1
Fucks attempted: 9
Fucks failed: 8
Unforgivable Curses: 6
great band names: Volsemort and Da Death Dealers; Fug and the Mystery of Magic; Alabastard
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Postby Nick Onimura (?) » Mon Nov 30, 2015 2:35 am

It was…………………….Tom Bombodil!1111 


Jesus christ, even with all the typos in this story, how do you mix that up? It just blows my mind.
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Postby Space Ghost (?) » Mon Nov 30, 2015 2:43 am

this gets better and better
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Postby Orange Fluffy Sheep (?) » Mon Nov 30, 2015 2:48 am

Nick Onimura wrote:
Jesus christ, even with all the typos in this story, how do you mix that up? It just blows my mind.


It's one of those things people cite as evidence this is a trollfic as Tara is comically uncultured, so how would she know a minor Lord of the Rings character?
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Postby Dexanth (?) » Mon Nov 30, 2015 3:26 am

Orange Fluffy Sheep wrote:
It's one of those things people cite as evidence this is a trollfic as Tara is comically uncultured, so how would she know a minor Lord of the Rings character?


'one of those things'?

I mean, I just cannot conceive at this point of this being anything but a trollfic. For the complete lack of care displayed at basic everything else the author somehow pulls out each relevant but wrong in just the right way MacGuffin whenever required.
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Postby SlateSlabrock (?) » Mon Nov 30, 2015 6:38 am

Orange Fluffy Sheep wrote:It was…………………….Tom Bombodil!1111 

No

no no no no

Tom Bombadil frolics around in his happy little forest and sings goofy songs.

Please don't make him goth.

Dexanth wrote:I mean, I just cannot conceive at this point of this being anything but a trollfic. For the complete lack of care displayed at basic everything else the author somehow pulls out each relevant but wrong in just the right way MacGuffin whenever required.

If it's not an absolutely blatant troll, then her friend/editor is deliberately sabotaging her at every single step.
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Postby Space Ghost (?) » Mon Nov 30, 2015 11:52 am

i'll say it again, if this is a trollfic it's the most dedicated trolling i've seen, because this person created another account for tara's friend in adition to apparently operating tara's account for a few years

like, if it is a trollfic, this person deserves applause for dedication
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Postby Dexanth (?) » Mon Nov 30, 2015 12:40 pm

Nothing says it can't be the efforts of more than one person working together and it very likely is
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Postby Space Ghost (?) » Mon Nov 30, 2015 12:52 pm

that doesn't change that it's a lot of dedication for a troll
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Postby In West Fillydelphia (?) » Mon Nov 30, 2015 7:54 pm

Dexanth wrote:Nothing says it can't be the efforts of more than one person working together and it very likely is


Right up until one of them steals a sweeter :applejargh:
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Postby Space Ghost (?) » Mon Nov 30, 2015 7:55 pm

who wrote my immortal is one of those big mysteries
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Postby In West Fillydelphia (?) » Mon Nov 30, 2015 8:06 pm

Captain Sunshine wrote:who wrote my immortal is one of those big mysteries


Pretty sure it'll be on the History channel soon enough.
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Postby Space Ghost (?) » Mon Nov 30, 2015 8:11 pm

In West Fillydelphia wrote:
Pretty sure it'll be on the History channel soon enough.


it was aliens
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Postby In West Fillydelphia (?) » Mon Nov 30, 2015 9:25 pm

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I need to work on the icy blue eyes. They don't quite strike me as limpid tears.

Also don't look too closely at her legs.
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Postby Chaos Sonic (?) » Tue Dec 01, 2015 7:58 pm

Orange Fluffy Sheep wrote:It was…………………….Tom Bombodil!1111 

oh god i can't stop laughing at this
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Postby In West Fillydelphia (?) » Tue Dec 08, 2015 1:03 pm

OFS is just teaching us something.
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Postby Space Ghost (?) » Tue Dec 08, 2015 1:08 pm

this thread is a big lesson
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Postby Orange Fluffy Sheep (?) » Tue Dec 08, 2015 7:14 pm

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AN: I sed stup fflaming I no his nam iznt tom bodil dat wuz a mistak!1111 if u dnot lik de story den u kan go skrew urself!11111 U SUK!111111


Tara acknowledges that it's not Tom Bombadil, but she never refers to this person as Tom Riddle, and in fact never gets the surname right.

It still raises the question of how the hell she knows about Bombadil but like many things it is a mystery.

Hi.” I said flirtily. “Im Enoby Way da new student.” I shok my pale handz wif their blak noil polish wif him.


Makes me wonder why she has 3 middle names. She changed her nail polish, since it had red crosses on each nail when she held Vampire's alabastard hand. Her nails are always some combination of red or black, with random religious symbolism sometimes.

“Da name’s Tom.” he said. “But u kan call me Satan. Datz ma middle nam”


TOM SATAN BOMBADIL

The characters explain oh my Satan and proclaim things in the name of Satan all the time, and these will happen even while a character named Satan is in the room.

We shok hands. “Well come on we have 2 go upstairs.” Satan said. I followed him.


None of the following events make this statement make sense.

“Hey Satan……..do u happen to be a fan of Gren Day?” (sinz mcr and evinezenz dont exist yet den) I asked.

“Oh my fuking god, how did u know?” Satan gasped. “actually I like gc a lot too.”(geddit coz gc did that song I just wanna live that’s ounded really 80s)


Did I say things were about to get confusing with time travel? It's because Tara treats it far more casually than she should. It gets worse than things arbitrarily being older because it sounds funny.

omg me too!” I replied happily.

“guess what they have a concert in hogsment.” satan whispered.

“hogsment?” I asked.

“yeah that’s what they used to call it in these time before it became Hogsmeade in 2000.”


Satan just knows things and it's never explained how or why

no hogsmeade never changed its name I have no idea why this is a thing

he told me all sekrtivly. “and theres a really cool shop called Hot-“

‘topic!” I finshed, happy again.

He froned confusedly. “noo its called Hot Ishoo.” He smiled skrtvli again. “then in 1998 dey changd it to hot topic.” he moaned.


is satan supposed to be a diviner or something

no hot topic has never changed its name its always been hot topic

why is he moaning it

“ohh.” now everything was making sense for me.


SHARE WITH THE CLASS FOR THE LOVE OF FUCK

“so is dumblydor your princepill?” I shouted.

“uh-huh.” he looked at his black nails. “im in slitherin’”

“OMfG SHME TOO!” I SHRIEDKED.

“u go to this skull?”(geddit cos im goffik) he asked.

“yah that’s why im here im NEW.” I SMELLED HAPPili.


Smelling happily? Eboby are you giving into the main stream?!

...why are you shrieking? Why is anything happening will the prince pill give me a pointy guitar

Suddenly dumblydore flew in on his broomstuck and started shredding at us angrily. “NO TALKING IN THE HALLS!” he had short blonde hair and was wearing a polo shirt from Amrikan ogle outfters. “STUPID GOFFS!”


You know he's a dumb prep because he's wearing an American Eagle polo and his hair isn't dyed black.

American Eagle was founded in '77 so it is actually old enough for Dumbledore to have a shirt from there.

Anywaaaaaaaaaaaay Dumbledore was still over 100 in the 80's so his hair would still be grayed as hell. In flashbacks to Tom Riddle's childhood when Dumbledore was in his 50 and his hair starting to gray, I guess it would look blonde. ish.

Nevermind that Tom Riddle was a child in the 1930s and this is Tom Riddle as an angsty goffik teenanger in the 1980s, wait this is Tom Bombadil, Tom Rid is an entirely unrelated character, no nothing makes sense someone please stab me I want to bleed out & die instead of attempting to comprehend more of this

satan rolled his eyes. “his so mean to us goffs and punks just becose we’re in slytherine and we’re not preps.”


Glad to see thsi goff /prep conflict is ageless, as it is happening 20 years later.

I think it's 20

Enony just went vaguely to "the eighties"

I turned around angrily. “actually I fink mebe its becos ur da barke lord.”

“wtf?” he asked angrily.

“oh nuffin.” I said sweetly.


"Dumbledore is vaguely upset with you because you're pure evil."

"what the fuck?"

"nevermind"

yep that's hwo real aplepoladgnake taltkealtr

then suddenlyn………………. the floor opened. “OMFG NO I SCEAMED AS I FEEL DOWN. everyone looked At ME weirdly.”


bby evry1s lookin b'cuz yr narrating again

“hey where r u goin?” satan asked as I fell.

I got out of the hole n it was bak in the pensive in professor trevolry’s classroom. dumblydum wuz dere. “dumblydore I think I just met u.” I said.

“oh yeah I rememba that.” dumblydor said, trying to be all goffik.


I MISS THAT POLO YOU MOTHERFUKERS

sinister came in. “hey dis is my classroom wait wtf enoby what da hell r u doing?”

”um.” I looked at her.
“oh yeaH I forgot bout that.”


I sympathize with Professor Sinister a lot suddenly, I'd like to forget about this too.

“wth how?” I screamed forgetting she was a teacher for a second. but shes a goff so its ok.


You scream at teachers all the time though, especially if they're not goff.

How does her being goff change things?

what's

professor sinster looked sad. “um I was drinking voldemortserum.” she started to cry black tears of depression. dumblydum didn’t know about them.

“hey r u crying tears of blood?” he asked curiously, tuching a tear.

“fuck off!” we both said and dumblydum took his hand away.


I AM JUST CURIOUS ABOUT THIS YOU MOTHERFUKERS

is this running mascara or is she so goff even the water in her body is black who fucking cares

professor sinster started crying again in her chair, sobbing limpid tears. “omfg enoby…I think im addicted to Voldemortserum.”

AN: SEE U FOKKING PREPZ GO FOK URSELXXZ DATZ SERUS ISSUZ 2O GO 2 HELL!1111112 


The serious issues: this insane lady is addicted to a fictional truth potion.

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“Oh hey there bitch.” Profesor Trevolry said in an emo voice dirnking some Volxemortserom .

OK class fucking dismissed every1.

I was wearing & kin: 40
strange adverbs: kiss keenly; kiss passively; cry wisely; shook her head enrgtically lethrigcly; nodded ENREGeticALLlY; sacredly I hopped inside; screamed sexily; frenching passively; smelled happily; passively we did it; cry all sexy and sexitive; shoot angrily (actually using firearms); loafing meanly; took out anvilly; jumped sexily into the penisve
Oh my satans: 2
Windows broken: 1
Time Travel Paradoxes, Anachronisms, and Complications: fuck
Fucks attempted: 9
Fucks failed: 8
Unforgivable Curses: 6
great band names: Volsemort and Da Death Dealers; Fug and the Mystery of Magic; Alabastard
Sicknasty burns: ludacris fools; mediocre dunces; ridiculous nitwits; stupid preppy fucker; dude-ur-so-retarded look; mean old man; horny simpletons; dispicable snobs; despicable preps; moronic idiots; fuck u you preppy little poser sun of a fukcing bich; fucking bustard; inlosent fools; ridiculus dondderhed
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Postby In West Fillydelphia (?) » Tue Dec 08, 2015 7:30 pm

American Ogle

Geddit

Cos every1 finks Enoby is hot.
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Postby Space Ghost (?) » Tue Dec 08, 2015 7:43 pm

what the fuck did i just read
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Postby Angel Beat (?) » Tue Dec 08, 2015 8:24 pm

Captain Sunshine wrote:what the fuck did i just read

tiddy anime vn precursor?
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Postby Space Ghost (?) » Tue Dec 08, 2015 8:26 pm

Angel Beat wrote:tiddy anime vn precursor?


do not compare this masterpiece to tiddy anime vn
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Postby Orange Fluffy Sheep (?) » Tue Dec 08, 2015 8:31 pm

my immortal is an entirely different kind of wish fulfillment than anime tiddy vns
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Postby In West Fillydelphia (?) » Tue Dec 08, 2015 8:33 pm

Yeah in tiddy vns they euphemise sex more effectively than "then he put his thingie in my you know what and we did it"
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Postby Orange Fluffy Sheep (?) » Tue Dec 08, 2015 8:45 pm

it's like saying there's no difference between Conan the Barbarian and the porn star ordering pizza with extra sausage.

Just because they both involve "I would like my real life to be like this idealized situation" doesn't mean they have much in common. Conan is about the incredibly muscular guy who can in fact solve everything with brute force and destroy enemies by crushing them. The extra sausage is about the average joe still getting to have sex with extremely attractive women.

My Immortal is Tara wanting to be something beyond the mundane drudgery of everyday life - so she's a vampire witch - and to have relationships with hot goffick guys. Part of that is sex, but there's also the melodramatic declarations of longing. She's got a very immature understanding of relationships, that it's just the confession and the sex, which make it seem like all she knows about love is media like TV and movies. Once they kiss the credits roll, none of the actual complications of real relationships. It's just emotions and fucking.

Anime tiddy vns present the viewer with anime tiddy with more narrative than just pictures alone give. The lead-up allows the viewer to immerse themselves into the situation so that when the anime tiddy comes flying out it's more than just "neat tiddy" it's "neat this lady is bringing out the tiddy for me" because most people irl tend not to get large amounts of anime tiddy flying out at them (if you do consult your physician).
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Postby In West Fillydelphia (?) » Tue Dec 08, 2015 8:49 pm

I see it that Tiddy VNs give the audience what they want, while My Immortal gives the audience what it never asked for.
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Postby Orange Fluffy Sheep (?) » Tue Dec 08, 2015 9:20 pm

My Immortal is author wish fulfillment, which is different than what Indiana Jones or James Bond present. My Immortal is specifically Tara's fantasy and what she wants. James Bond drives neat cars, has neat gadgets, kisses hot women, and kills bad people without remorse or punishment, none of which are specifically the filmmaker's desires but instead a buffet of incredible events. Don't you wish you had this awesome car instead of your 8-year-old low-end model? Don't you wish you had a laser watch, and kissed a lady who unironically calls herself Eight Vaginas, and could solve the world's problems by slaying their evil perpetrators? At least one of those?

If you're talking about DNA Gelded Belt or whatever it's not like most anime tiddy VNs. It's not nearly as much wish fulfillment fantasy.
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